Entry to become a talk show co-host.

My local radio station is holding a competition to replace one of the two co-hosts in the morning talk show, and I’m trying for it. The hosts are both familiar with me, and my moving forward in the competition will have more to do with how they think of me than what I’m writing here in all likelihood, but the first round of the competition is a 200 word (maximum) essay explaining why I want the position and my unique qualities.

This is my second complete draft. I’m very interested in specific feedback about this. Writing in such a tight limit is a real challenge, and I want to make sure that what I’ve written is sufficient and sufficiently clear about who I am and what I have to say. You folk here have a pretty good idea of what I have to say in longer bursts, so you can tell me if what I’ve written here is doing the job well:

I have loved radio for many years. Twenty years ago, I had a show on KUGS so I could reach people. I began regularly listening to KGMI shortly after that so I could participate in the discussion of issues through the talk-shows, beginning with Impact. When I began appearing on Impact as a guest, I learned that I could face the KGMI listening audience and engage them in discussion. I also did several KGMI Guest Editorials. I would now like to take the next step of facing that audience as Brett’s partner.

I am an open-minded, moderate conservative Republican Mormon child-care worker, college student, sporadic blogger, Linux user and parent. I’ve been a candidate, campaign worker and poll worker. My somewhat unusual positions challenge the overly-simplistic positions we usually hear, particularly with the perennial issues like abortion, capital punishment, welfare, taxes, and, now, Islam, terrorism, war and the President. I enjoy respectful disagreement because I learn more from those with different perspectives, and a bit of edge just makes it more fun. I have in-depth knowledge of the space program, domestic abuse, foster care, communication and local politics.

We could have a lot of fun.

I’d like to work some humor in, but I’m not sure what not to say to make room for it. I have to submit this in just a few days.

Thanks.

9 thoughts on “Entry to become a talk show co-host.

  1. It sounds great! I’m not sure what you could remove to insert humor either, maybe tighten up the first paragraph a little bit, but that’s not going to give you much more “room”

  2. I could take out the last paragraph and replace it with “And I look good in my kilt.”

    I could also cut out one or two of the perennial issues to buy a few words. I would like to mention my dancing, at least in passing. My uniqueness, if I have any, is in my combination of interests and skills. Including dancing would add a whole new facet to the picture.

    Thanks for the input.

  3. If you just want a little bit, you could do something like this…

    I have loved radio for many years. Twenty years ago, I had a show on KUGS so I could reach people. I began regularly listening to KGMI shortly after that so I could participate in the discussion of issues through the talk-shows, beginning with Impact, where I learned I could face the KGMI listeners and engage them in discussion. I also did several KGMI Guest Editorials. I would now like to take the next step of facing that audience as Brett’s partner.

  4. It looks like you’re compacting calling in on Impact and appearing in-studio as a guest. I think having both pieces shows the progression from less involvement to more involvement more clearly.

  5. I love it!

    Things I would consider changing: Use of “face the” / “face that” … I’d change one to vary the language, or do something else to make the theme more clear. Or, is there something in the contest materials that is leading you to say those phrases?

    To win back some word space: First two sentences of 1st paragraph could become “I love radio. Twenty years ago, I reached people through my show on KUGS.” “after that so I could” in third sentence could become “thereafter, to “. “I began” could be deleted from 4th sentence. Also in 4th sentence, the ‘that’ in “I learned that I could” could be deleted. In the second paragraph, I don’t think you need “the” before “perennial”. You might consider deleting “because I learn more from those with different perspectives”, it doesn’t add much.

    You sound much more comfortable in the second paragraph — talking about your unique qualifications.

    Is the content of the program mostly national politics? You only mention local issues once, at the very end.

  6. Thank you. This helps a great deal. I’ve hacked up the first paragraph heavily and pushed a bit more into the second.

    The show deals with issues on pretty much any level, ranging from local to global. Might see if I can squeeze more of that into place somewhere. Here’s the revision inspired by your feedback:

    I love radio. Twenty years ago, I reached people through my show on KUGS. I began regularly listening to KGMI shortly after that and began discussing issues by calling the talk-shows, beginning with Impact. When I began appearing on Impact as a guest, I held my own with the hosts, including Brett and Debbie, and with the KGMI listening audience. I also did several KGMI Guest Editorials. I would now like to take the next step of facing that audience as Brett’s partner.

    I am an open-minded, moderate conservative Republican Mormon child-care worker, college student, sporadic blogger, Linux user, contradancer, storyteller and parent. I’ve been a candidate, campaign worker and poll worker. I look manly dancing in my kilt. My somewhat unusual positions challenge the overly-simplistic positions we usually hear, particularly with perennial issues like abortion, capital punishment, welfare, taxes, and, now, Islam, terrorism, war and the President. I enjoy respectful disagreement because I learn more from those with different perspectives, and a bit of edge just makes it more fun. I have in-depth knowledge of the space program, domestic abuse, foster care, communication and local politics.

    We could have a lot of fun.

    I managed to work in dancing and some humor this time, which I like better.

    But I’m running late to the Independence Day barbecue and I need to pick someone up. I’m really glad I posted this here, because I really like the way it’s shaping up with the feedback I’m getting.

  7. A few more minor tweaks based on feedback this afternoon:

    I love radio. Twenty years ago, I reached people through my show on KUGS. I began regularly listening to KGMI shortly after that and began discussing issues by calling the talk-shows, beginning with Impact. Since I began appearing on Impact as a guest, I’ve held my own with the hosts, including Brett and Debbie, and with the KGMI listening audience. I also did several KGMI Guest Editorials. I would now like to take the next step of facing that audience as Brett’s partner.

    I am an open-minded, moderate conservative Republican Mormon child-care worker, college student, sporadic blogger, Linux user, contradancer, storyteller and parent. I look manly dancing in my kilt. I’ve been a candidate, campaign worker and poll worker. My somewhat unusual positions challenge the overly-simplistic positions we usually hear, particularly with perennial issues like abortion, capital punishment, welfare, taxes, and, now, Islam, terrorism, war and the President. I enjoy respectful disagreement because I learn more from those with different perspectives, and a bit of edge just makes a conversation more fun. I have in-depth knowledge of the space program, domestic abuse, foster care, communication and local politics.

    We could have a lot of fun.

  8. Buy a few more words by removing “I love radio”

    s/I reached/I began reaching/

    Do the kilt comment instead of the fun comment

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